The Passion
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Clairedelune 2008-03-29 9:53
I've looked at both versions on two different screen, just to see if I would change idea. But no. Then, I'll go against the general opinion here: I prefer your first version!
I guess that you might wanna know why... Or not. But I will tell you nevertheless. First, the more shaky reason, the sepia. Shaky, because it is more a question of taste. I'm not a big fan of sepia. I will admit that your version is not bad though. Kind of light, which is quite pleasing. But somehow, I miss the more natural tone of his skin... So, done with the shaky reason.
What I miss here the most is his right arm. You have darken quite a lot the background. I understand, but I think in the process, you have lost his arm. And in my opinion, this arm was essential, giving an air of "I don't give a damn!" about the boy, that is less strong in this new version. And somehow, we are also loosing the pants... And those pants speak clear and sound too! They have meaning on who this young guy want to project, his "persona"...
Ok, the last point is that there is that white line around his left shoulder... on the wall! It was there on your previous version but less evident. For me, it doesn't work. Personally, I would leave the stains of the wall, and the metal thing, because they also speak loud about the place, but I will do something with that white line...
Somehow, I think you've lost sight of the guy here...
Claire
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